SAM, Y U NO WRITE BETTER? (Newbies, DON'T DO ANY OF THESE!)

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Post  PsychoticDoctor on Fri Sep 06, 2013 12:43 am

Well, anyone wanna post examples of what NOT to do?
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Re: SAM, Y U NO WRITE BETTER? (Newbies, DON'T DO ANY OF THESE!)

Post  NebulaGregarZX on Fri Sep 06, 2013 12:54 am

Please, we have enough decency to not do this on his birthday...

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Post  PsychoticDoctor on Fri Sep 06, 2013 12:56 am

It isn't like he can see it


But you do have a point.
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Re: SAM, Y U NO WRITE BETTER? (Newbies, DON'T DO ANY OF THESE!)

Post  Zeldaman2.0 on Fri Sep 06, 2013 12:57 am

Something inside Sammy cracked. His hair turned black, and his eyes glowed lavender again. Aura flared at least 50 feet high. He grabbed Junpei by the collar of his shirt, and said, in an angry, distorted voice,"I didn't ****ing kill him! The coat, WHICH WAS STEPHANIE'S, did it ON IT'S OWN. GOT IT? I'm being dead ****ing serious..." His face turned blank, then suddenly the aura flared up to the cosmos. His face was slightly different now, with just lavender filling his eyes. He then said,"If you EVER ****ing tell me to do the world a favor by dying, hell, if you even PISS ME OFF ONE MORE TIME, I WILL ****ING WIPE YOUR EXISTANCE OF THIS ****ING MORTAL PLANE!" He then threw Junpei into a building wall.

This, for one.
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Post  Haar_Dragon on Fri Sep 06, 2013 2:09 am

Yep. That one was ban-worthy. I know because I voted to ban him for it.

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Post  PsychoticDoctor on Fri Sep 06, 2013 2:16 am

"This from GFAQS?"
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Post  NebulaGregarZX on Fri Sep 06, 2013 2:22 am

...
...I don't want to dig around to find examples after having just read through that section a week ago... somebody else do it.

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Post  khfreak358 on Fri Sep 06, 2013 2:30 am

Waitwaitwait, what was Zelda talking about? I'm assuming he did this because someone said something that would have just been mildly irking, yes?

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Post  Haar_Dragon on Fri Sep 06, 2013 2:53 am

Probably something anybody else might have responded to with "You wanna make something of it?"

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Post  Zeldaman2.0 on Fri Sep 06, 2013 3:45 am

Junpei glared at Sammy raising his katana again, "I saw you murder a police officer, you think I'm just going to let that slide because you DON'T WANT TO FIGHT?!" His blade burned with an intense hatred, "I'll end you in one blow. Do the world a favor."

Admin had posted that, and I don't recall enough to confirm or deny Sam's actions before that. He then posted what I pasted.
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Post  Zeldaman2.0 on Fri Sep 06, 2013 3:55 am

Part of another of his posts:
He was cut short when a gunshot rang through the lab and the bullet pierced his skull, killing him on impact. The man said," Where are those ****ing sedatives?!? Goddamnit, I'll just do the surgery without 'em!" He slammed the door to Cecily's cell open, and threw the 13 year old girl onto the metal table, and pulled out a drill, and began to drill into her head. She let loose a bloodcurdling scream, and the flashback ended there. Cecily then said,"I can't!" and began to cry. Sammy said,"Cecily, are you ok?" Cecily then said,"What the hell do you think?!? I'm not!" Suddenly, metallic footsteps were heard.

...a 13 year old girl has a drill pressed into her head. And she lived.

The fuck. Also, wasn't this girl one of his allegedly many girlfriends?
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Post  NebulaGregarZX on Fri Sep 06, 2013 3:59 am

The most recent one, which was relegated to my control. I sent her running though an unfamiliar city in a blind panic, and she most likely ran right into the middle of a street and got run over. That, or I'm just too lazy to think of a way to use her character.

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Post  Zeldaman2.0 on Fri Sep 06, 2013 4:15 am

So basically, in case we get anyone really new to the whole shebang, beginner tips:

-if you're not the best at detailing things out, try the Script format (don't worry, even us vets use it!)
-try to put forth an effort to use proper spelling and grammar. We don't expect perfection, just an effort.
-plan out how your characters will develop. Account that you aren't the only user on here
-ask for tips. Good members to ask are any of the mods, and the users Malakili, khfreak, ARanger, Akeybladeyousay, and NebulaGregar.
-don't worry about fights, we won't kill your characters unless you, the author, allow it to happen.
-if you wanna have characters develop relationships, fine. But no ecchi/sex/fanporn/whatever in the forums proper.
-limit your swearing. Oftentimes, a single "F*ck" in a really serious situation, perhaps in place of an "Oh no"? Really works well. Doesn't work quite as well when your character swears like a sailor.
-we get that you may be the biggest fan ever of something. All of us are to one thing or another. Just try not to innundate your characters and stories with it unless it's REALLY necessary.
-we have topics for nearly everything. Wanna share something? Go right on ahead.
Any more questions? PM any of the users I detailed for tips, and we'd be glad to help.


...I'm leaving this here in case we ever get new users for whatever the hell reason.
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